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Monday, 16 May 2011

The Octain...


 A completely newform to me.  For more information visit out friends at:

One Stop Monday Form – Octains

Always a good place to go.


When black clouds ink the sky so deep
a granite hue it weighs life down,
 presses a smile into a frown,
so making clouds begin to weep,
a shaft of light , the sky turns bright,
there shattering, its colours seep
and paint the air a rainbow gown,
when black clouds ink the sky so deep.

Than out of the deep recesses of my mind pops:

My well of inspiration’s dry

I dip my thoughts into the space

where words should dance with fluid grace



and find a desert’s windy sigh

no poetry to refresh me

the pictures desiccate and die.



my pen is still, it can not race

my well of inspiration’s dry.





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13 comments:

  1. Ginny Brannan16 May 2011 at 21:10

    Very nice! I like them both, especially the second one. I can relate to the well being dry!

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  2. Kerry O'Connor16 May 2011 at 21:16

    A beautiful graphic which your words have brought to life.

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  3. Victoria16 May 2011 at 23:26

    Beautiful images in the first one. The 2nd one touches us all, I imagine.

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  4. Maude Lynn17 May 2011 at 02:44

    Wow! Love that second one!

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  5. Anonymous17 May 2011 at 03:10

    when I first came to u'r blog. I was like "yippy, am not the only one having trouble". I read further. It was truly good and I could relate

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  6. richardpiszczek17 May 2011 at 06:12

    It amazes me just how you are able to come up with such great poetry time after time.Well done Penny.

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  7. ALIVE aLwaYs17 May 2011 at 07:36

    Wow! you wrote two,
    you seem to have got the hang of it.

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  8. Jinksy17 May 2011 at 13:46

    I enjoyed the second one best. :)

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  9. Claudia17 May 2011 at 18:11

    ha - it looks like it wasn't really dry...smiles - a fine octain you brought to the table! i esp. love dipping thoughts into the space..nice

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  10. Luke Prater17 May 2011 at 23:03

    Two fer the price of one? First isn't stanza-broken, but both look like fine Octains to me. Kudos.

    In your first - it's iambic tetrameter all the way bar one place -

    'a shaft of light turns the sky bright,' >'the' is messing the meter, how about this? - 'a shaft of light turns sky to bright/;the sky turns bright'?

    as it stands it looks like this metrically -

    a SHAFT | of LIGHT | TURNS the | sky BRIGHT

    Love this line from your second -

    'the pictures desiccate and die.'

    Great work

    Cheers

    Luke

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  11. Penny18 May 2011 at 06:06

    Thanks Luke!

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  12. JL Dodge18 May 2011 at 17:02

    If this is a dry well of inspiration I'm a nun !!
    You mastered the Octain Penny Well done !
    JL&B

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  13. Luke Prater19 May 2011 at 15:37

    Hi Pen - How would you feel about me including your Octains in a thread I have running on Facebook - nearing 100 mark now - © retained by you of course and if you're on FB I can tag u in it so u can see all Octains written so far. Or else I can email you the entire thing. My FB account is on my sidebar of my blog. No probs if not. Hit me back - rapture_elk@yahoo.co.uk

    cheers mate

    Luke

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