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Monday, 21 February 2011

Tanka -more complex than it seems

One Stop Poetry Form Monday – Tanka with the help of Lady Nyo
Just when I think I've got my head round it all, along comes this excellent pieces and throws all my ideas back up in the air.  I love it!

As the leaves now fall
At winter's cold arrival
My heart will wither
When you turn away from me
Saying that our love is done.

10 comments:

  1. there is much to learn and the exploring brings answers...plenty from within...a good tanka

    Peace, hp

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  2. BEAUTIFUL Tanka!@!!

    Excellent! You have the pivot line going well...you have two magnificent poems here, united by that important pivot line, and you have a wonderful 'kigo' there.

    This is so classical (in the very best sense!) tanka, and a wonderful piece at that!

    Lady Nyo...just so excited to read this beautiful poem.

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  3. What little I know about tanka,the 5-7-5-7-7 show that you nailed it,also it was a great poem.

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  4. This is glorious and penned from the soul. I'm imagining you in a kimono saying goodbyes to the one you loved now lol!

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  5. Sad piece, but brilliantly done tanka. Nice take on the prompt.

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  6. Yes beautiful and wonderful transition from one poem to the other....bkm

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  7. nice great job on the tanka...and great parallel between winter and a break up

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  8. Well done you!
    Couldn't ask for greater praise, could you?
    Complete with exclamation marks :-)
    Well deserved. Will you be sticking to this format for a while?

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