The rhythm of my heart is strong
In spite of all the times it’s bled.
It’s me that’s right and you that’s wrong
The rhythm of my heart is strong
Oh you can chant your mournful song
You can’t take back the things you’ve said.
The rhythm of my heart is strong
In spite of all the times it’s bled.
One Stop Poetry Form – Triolet by guest host Shan Hendry
Any flaws are my own.
I'll add this in smaller writing, groan if you wish....
It's how you say it....
I went to write a trioletA single stanza of a bud,
About a little violet
I went to write a triolet
The problem with a violet
Is find a rhyme I never could
I went to write a triolet
A single stanza of a bud,
Pen, wow you did such a good job! The iambs in the lines are great and strong...note on form : You're a syllable short in line B, all you need to do isadd a "the"
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And then this would be a heartwrenching little triolet! Thank you ever so much in taking your time to participate! Hope to see you next week too! :D
Do you know, I read that 'the' in place every time I looked at this? Thanks for pointing it out!
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ReplyDeleteWow!, can I relate to this, Pen... Deep!
♥ ஆ εlεɳa ~.^
always a pleasure to see your take, so talented !!
ReplyDeleteLove both of these triolets...thank you for sharing ...bkm
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