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Monday, 21 March 2011

a Rondel Prime or “French Sonnet”


 For more infor on Rondels follow this link!
http://onestoppoetry.com/2011/03/one-stop-poetry-form-rondels.html

 When I'm With You.

I see you turn and laugh at me,
My fears then melt and drip away.
How can my heart not have its say
When it is full of love and glee?

Sometimes I’m sure you can not see
The love I feel, that you will stray.
I see you turn and laugh at me
My fears then melt and drip away.

And this is how it seems to be,
My heart is strong, my mind falls prey
To fear and doubts that you will stay.
But all these worries turn and flee,
I see you turn and laugh at me,
My fears then melt and drip away.
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14 comments:

  1. Anita Magdalena21 March 2011 at 10:34

    Well done, a great Rondel.

    Anita.

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  2. Anonymous21 March 2011 at 14:21

    Hey Pen! Is this derived from that amazing triolet you wrote last week? Great stuff! I'm not a rondel master but I think the end stanza has 5 lines ending with the A refrain. I did my first this week too so not too sure!

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  3. Helena White21 March 2011 at 15:57

    Nice Penny!

    ♥ ஆεlεɳa ~.^

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  4. Claudia21 March 2011 at 17:27

    wow pen - this is great - you went for a rondel prime with an extra line and the B refrain repeating - excellent - perfect iambic tetrameter - smooth flow - good rhymes---kudos!

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  5. JL Dodge21 March 2011 at 17:49

    You never cease to amaze me Penny... Well done !

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  6. hedgewitch21 March 2011 at 20:28

    Quite a well-balanced rondel, with the real feeling of a song and a little twist to the scheme--Nice work.

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  7. Sean Vessey21 March 2011 at 23:29

    Great write. I love the love poems band a rondel besides.

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  8. Beachanny22 March 2011 at 00:19

    I liked this quite a lot too. Agree with all the comments above. Well done. Gay

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  9. Tashtoo22 March 2011 at 00:21

    Looks like it's back to the drawing/writing board for me! lol Some fierce writes being posted this week, great job!

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  10. Maude Lynn22 March 2011 at 01:12

    Very well done!

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  11. Sheila22 March 2011 at 02:45

    you made this form look easy and for me, it was not. kudos :)

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  12. Brian Miller22 March 2011 at 02:55

    i really love the sentiment of this...int he doubts the look that melts them away...

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  13. richardpiszczek23 March 2011 at 17:51

    Not being a poet myself, just how you come up with these ideas and then turn them into pictures so wonderfully described is beyond me.Excellent.

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  14. rallentanda24 March 2011 at 16:13

    Good one. I'm glad you like cats.

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